As the fog spreads across the desered street...

So...I guess it has been some time since I last put something up on here. Not too good, seeing how there needs to be multiple entries. Well...here's #3.

I think that I am really making progress from where I was since the last time I put something up on here. I have moved from only a few lines of dialogue to a full sixteen pages. I have even made some changes to the opening scene (let me be more clear with that...I've completely revamped what the opening scene will be). What was originally the opening scene now moves to a bit later in the script because the flow is much more sedated than what is necessary to bring the audience into the story.

I submit for your edification, the new opening scene:

EXT: PANTHEON CHEMICAL COMPANY – EARLY EVENING

Establishing shot of chemical plant. A sunset can be seen in the sky.

CUT TO INT: PANTHEON CHEMICAL COMPANY

Two chemical workers, male aged mid- to late- 30s, are sitting at a table in the middle of the break room. The room is rundown with dim lighting. A coffee pot is on the counter. One of the workers gets up to get another cup of coffee.

WORKER #1

This is the third extra shift I pulled this week.

WORKER #2

(Turning around from the coffee pot)

Those suits are working us into nothing. I was supposed to take Cindy and the kids to go see Bob the Builder Live the other night.

Worker #2 turns back around to the coffee pot and fills his cup with coffee.

WORKER #1

I got called in over Christmas for a leak on the main valve. Sometimes it seems like this place is going to be the death of me.

WORKER #2

You want more coffee?

WORKER #1

Yeah…sure.

Worker #2 grabs another Styrofoam cup, fills it. He walks back to the table and give Worker #1 another cup of coffee.

WORKER #1

Thanks, man. Sorry, I just needed to vent. I just get tired sometimes…especially when half of my life is spent here.

WORKER #2

That’s completely understandable. Hopefully, things will get better.

An alarm begins to sound off over the PA system, and a red light on the wall begins to flash. A woman’s voice begins to speak over the PA.

WOMAN’S VOICE (V.O.)

We need emergency response to Level 2.

Repeat. We need emergency response to Level 2.

WORKER #1

What were you saying about it getting better?

WORKER #2

Shoulda known better, I guess.

As they scramble to the door, they grab their hard hats and begin running down the corridor.

CUT TO: INT: PANTHEON CHEMCIAL PLANT-LEVEL 2-MOMENTS LATER

WORKER #3

Get your asses over here! She’s gonna blow!

Workers 1 and 2 run over to help Worker 3

WORKER #2

You know this isn’t really a good idea to open this door.

WORKER #3

Listen pal, the only way to relieve the pressure is to open this door because the valve is in this room! If we don’t open it, the whole damn thing will pop like a zit!

WORKER #1

Okay, okay! Let’s get this door open then…

The three pry at the door, and it slowly opens. As they peer in, the pressure valve begins to shake and blows off. The pressure valve explodes as chemicals begin to spew out.

ALL

Oh shit!

The chemicals cover the three workers. As others rush over to help, they are sprayed with the chemical as well. The flow of chemical catches flame, and it begins to spread to the other workers. All of those covered in chemical and flame scream and writhe in pain.

EXT: PANTHEON CHEMICAL PLANT – MOMENTS LATER

The plant looks peaceful, as the sun has gone completely out of the sky. It seems calm until a mushroom cloud rises over the plant. The fallout takes out the company’s sign and the frame is filled with flames